Friday, September 16, 2005

Another One

!!! GROSSNESS ALERT!!! MORBIDITY ALERT!!! ETC!!!

4. The Numbers

She worked with numbers for forty years. And then she retired.

But the numbers wouldn’t go away. They stayed before her eyes, burnt forever into her retina. They danced before her, orange-red, and she snatched at them, trying to make them disappear. But they wouldn’t.

Finally, she gouged out her eyes. It didn’t help, though.

(55 words, not counting the title)

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This story came to me at two in the morning and it's sort of inspired by something from my life. Oh, and the last bit? My mum's idea. I was just going to shoot her outright, but my mum said that that was rather staid (!).

(Previously)

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17 comments:

Anonymous said...

hmmmmm

jasmine....

is that autobiographical?

nice...

"she gouged out her eyes"

reminded me of kill bill

cheers,
tECHJ

PS: yes, i am a "mallu" and i dont knwo to wear a "mundu", so did not wear it work...

Phoenix said...

Numbers..hmm..

Yeah it was staid!
But well done:)

Domesticated Bachelor said...

wondering if its late....:-P

Jade said...

tECHJ: Autobiographical? He-he. let's just say "inspired" by something that happened to me. The first part of the story, that is.

Phoenix: *GASP*!! Staid? Staid? How much gore do you want, young lady? :)

Joker: Huh? Late?

Kaala Kavva said...

@just-mean
bechare math hons. wale

Ad astra per aspera said...

This is rather addictive!
.... and you are rather good at this. Always loved your style.
Keep em coming.
:D

Jade said...

RCGM: Bechare indeed. :( But only cuz of the studying, not bcuz I'm going to murder them tomorrow! :)

Shilpa:

Before visiting your blog: Yay, she's back! :D

After visiting your blog: No, she's not! :(

Rohit said...

Good stuff, liked the end.

scsa_taker3 said...

ALL OY YOUR QUESTIONS ARE ANSWERS TO YOUR SINS....ALL OF YOUR ENDINGS ARE WAITING TO BEGIN...YOU GAVE ME A CHALLENGE AND SEPTMEBER IS NOT OVER YET...I TOLD YOU SOMETHIN AND NOW ITS DONE....
AND YoU HAVE WIERD IDEAS ABOUT PEOPLE AND THEIR IPODS..NOW DONT YOU...LATER

Jade said...

Rohit: Thanks. Will tell my mum. :)

scsa:

Let x= what ppl do with their ipods, according to our phone convos.

Well, x! :P

bookworm said...

i say the earlier one about the red and blue sweaters was better. this was good, but the ending wasn't sledgeharmmer enough :P

Ravi Handa said...

you call this gross???? :O u hve a lot to learn...

Jade said...

Bookworm: Thank you. Didn't think anyone had got that one.

Handa: Well, I'm sure you can teach me! ;)

Archster said...

Niiiiice. But i kinda saw that coming coz of the warning that came with it!

Domesticated Bachelor said...

late you know... for an appointment with a shrink *GRIN*:-P

Jade said...

Archster: hm.. mebbe I should remove the warning. Then again, I don't want the mothers of all the 'kids' visiting this blog to scream at me.

Joker: Oh.. thataway.. (Damn, I am slow!)

Domesticated Bachelor said...

tooblite...*GRIN*