Friday, September 16, 2005

Another One

!!! GROSSNESS ALERT!!! MORBIDITY ALERT!!! ETC!!!

4. The Numbers

She worked with numbers for forty years. And then she retired.

But the numbers wouldn’t go away. They stayed before her eyes, burnt forever into her retina. They danced before her, orange-red, and she snatched at them, trying to make them disappear. But they wouldn’t.

Finally, she gouged out her eyes. It didn’t help, though.

(55 words, not counting the title)

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This story came to me at two in the morning and it's sort of inspired by something from my life. Oh, and the last bit? My mum's idea. I was just going to shoot her outright, but my mum said that that was rather staid (!).

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17 comments:

  1. AnonymousSeptember 16, 2005 at 9:06 AM

    hmmmmm

    jasmine....

    is that autobiographical?

    nice...

    "she gouged out her eyes"

    reminded me of kill bill

    cheers,
    tECHJ

    PS: yes, i am a "mallu" and i dont knwo to wear a "mundu", so did not wear it work...

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  2. PhoenixSeptember 16, 2005 at 9:32 AM

    Numbers..hmm..

    Yeah it was staid!
    But well done:)

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  3. Domesticated BachelorSeptember 16, 2005 at 9:51 AM

    wondering if its late....:-P

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  4. JadeSeptember 16, 2005 at 12:45 PM

    tECHJ: Autobiographical? He-he. let's just say "inspired" by something that happened to me. The first part of the story, that is.

    Phoenix: *GASP*!! Staid? Staid? How much gore do you want, young lady? :)

    Joker: Huh? Late?

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  5. Kaala KavvaSeptember 16, 2005 at 1:38 PM

    @just-mean
    bechare math hons. wale

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  6. Ad astra per asperaSeptember 16, 2005 at 5:25 PM

    This is rather addictive!
    .... and you are rather good at this. Always loved your style.
    Keep em coming.
    :D

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  7. JadeSeptember 16, 2005 at 7:24 PM

    RCGM: Bechare indeed. :( But only cuz of the studying, not bcuz I'm going to murder them tomorrow! :)

    Shilpa:

    Before visiting your blog: Yay, she's back! :D

    After visiting your blog: No, she's not! :(

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  8. RohitSeptember 17, 2005 at 5:40 PM

    Good stuff, liked the end.

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  9. scsa_taker3September 17, 2005 at 6:17 PM

    ALL OY YOUR QUESTIONS ARE ANSWERS TO YOUR SINS....ALL OF YOUR ENDINGS ARE WAITING TO BEGIN...YOU GAVE ME A CHALLENGE AND SEPTMEBER IS NOT OVER YET...I TOLD YOU SOMETHIN AND NOW ITS DONE....
    AND YoU HAVE WIERD IDEAS ABOUT PEOPLE AND THEIR IPODS..NOW DONT YOU...LATER

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  10. JadeSeptember 17, 2005 at 9:47 PM

    Rohit: Thanks. Will tell my mum. :)

    scsa:

    Let x= what ppl do with their ipods, according to our phone convos.

    Well, x! :P

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  11. bookwormSeptember 18, 2005 at 8:45 AM

    i say the earlier one about the red and blue sweaters was better. this was good, but the ending wasn't sledgeharmmer enough :P

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  12. Ravi HandaSeptember 18, 2005 at 6:46 PM

    you call this gross???? :O u hve a lot to learn...

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  13. JadeSeptember 19, 2005 at 5:37 AM

    Bookworm: Thank you. Didn't think anyone had got that one.

    Handa: Well, I'm sure you can teach me! ;)

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  14. ArchsterSeptember 19, 2005 at 12:37 PM

    Niiiiice. But i kinda saw that coming coz of the warning that came with it!

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  15. Domesticated BachelorSeptember 19, 2005 at 1:16 PM

    late you know... for an appointment with a shrink *GRIN*:-P

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  16. JadeSeptember 19, 2005 at 9:58 PM

    Archster: hm.. mebbe I should remove the warning. Then again, I don't want the mothers of all the 'kids' visiting this blog to scream at me.

    Joker: Oh.. thataway.. (Damn, I am slow!)

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  17. Domesticated BachelorSeptember 20, 2005 at 10:15 AM

    tooblite...*GRIN*

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